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Why Overusing Adverbs Weakens Your Writing
Do you add adverbs in your sentences such as “he ran quickly” or “she said angrily” but still feel that your story feels flat?
This is where many beginner writers struggle with it. The truth is that use of excessive adverbs weakens your writing as it tells the reader what is going on rather than showing it with actions and emotions.
Verbs and vivid descriptions are more effective in scenes in fiction writing and particularly in novels than adverbs. You can make your writing stronger instead of using such words as “very,” “quickly,” or “loudly,” and so on by using specific strong verbs and expressing emotions with actions.
In this guide, you will know precisely how to identify, correct, and minimise adverbs in your writing step by step and make your scenes more interesting to readers.
What does it mean?
Adverbs are words which tells how something occurs. The most of the Adverbs end with “-ly,” such as,
- quickly
- slowly
- angrily
- softly
Initially, they appear to be useful in your writing, they provide additional detail, right?
However, the problem is as follows,
- Adverbs usually weaken your writing since they are shortcuts.
- They do not paint a clear picture but explain things in a weak or lazy manner.
For example:
“He ran quickly” tells us the action
“He sprinted” This shows it more clearly
The second sentence is better as the word sprinted already contains the meaning of speed. When writing fiction, you want to make the reader feel like they are there, not tell them all. The presence of too many adverbs makes your writing less vivid and less interesting. It does not means that all adverbs are bad however, overusing them can weaken your writing. Learn more about Common Grammar Mistakes Fiction Writers Make.
The Step-by-Step Guide on How to Not Overuse Adverbs
In case you are curious and to know how to avoid overuse use of adverbs, you can follow these step-by-step as a process which can be used during the process of your editing. There is no need to think about using adverbs when writing your first draft. First concentrate on writing the scene of the story initially and then, follow these steps when editing to improve your writing.
Step 1: Find the Adverbs.
Write a paragraph and then find words that have an ending of “-ly.”
Example:
- quietly
- suddenly
- nervously
Highlight them, this will make you aware of the frequency of their use. You can also use your editor’s search function to quickly find “ly” words.
Step 2: Question 2: Could I Use a Strong Verb?
Instead of:
“She walked slowly”
Try:
“She crept” or “She dragged her feet”
Instead of:
“He said loudly”
Try:
“He screamed” or “He shouted.”
Strong verbs helps you to avoid and eliminate the use of adverbs. It is to be noted that, not all adverbs are replaceable, yet majority of them can be replaced.
Step 3: Show, rather than tell.
Instead of,
“She said angrily”
Try:
“She banged the door and looked at him.”
Emotions are more clear through actions than adverbs.
You can also express emotion with little physical details, such as body language, tone or movement, and even sensory details such as what the character sees or hears.
Don’t feel pressured to substitute “said” either. “said” is virtually unseen by the readers. It is better to avoid dramatic tags such as “exclaimed” or “shouted loudly.” and add an action to “said”.
Step 4: Remove Unnecessary Intensifiers
Words like:
- very
- really
- extremely
These are usually weak adverbs.
Example:
For “very tired” can be replaced with word “exhausted”
For “really big”, can be replaced with word “massive”
Substitute weak expressions with more specific words.
Step 5: Keep Only the Value Adding Adverbs.
Not all adverbs are bad.
They are handy when,
- The meaning would be unclear without them
- The rhythm of the sentence needs them
It is not a strict rule to eliminate all adverbs, but to use them sparingly i.e when needed.
In some cases, an adverb helps to create a natural effect and is the best choice. For example, sentences like “He hardly said” or “She nearly dropped.” In these cases, trying to substitute them may lengthen the sentence or make it less understandable. It is not about not using adverbs at all but it’s all about not relying only on them.
Examples/Mini Tips
To make this more clear, let’s consider some simple examples.
Example 1: Weak vs Strong Writing
“He ran quickly down the street.” is weak writing and writing it as “He sprinted down the street.” make it strong, as “sprinted” is a strong verb.
Use a strong verb instead of “verb + adverb”
Example 2: Dialogue Improvement
“‘I don’t care,’ she said angrily.” It’s weak writing and “‘I don’t care.’ She folded her hands together and turned her back.” is strong as the emotions are conveyed by action
Remember, show emotion through body language or action or both.
Example 3: Description Upgrade
Avoid “very + adjective.” For example,
“The room was very dark.” is direct saying and its weak and when we write “The room was pitch black.” Select a more specific/precise word.
Before vs After
Before: Let’s consider an sentence with adverb, “He quickly walked into the room and looked around nervously.”
After: The improved version without adverb, “He rushed into the room, his eyes darting from corner to corner.”
Before is often said as telling and After is showing to readers.
Mini Tips
- While editing, remove words like “very,” “really,” and “quite” and replace them with appropriate words.
- Use a thesaurus to identify more powerful verbs.
- Read aloud your sentence—if it feels like a weak sentence, it is likely to sound weak.
- Concentrate on what the character does, not what he or she tells.
Common Mistakes Made By Beginners
1. Using Adverbs in Every Sentence
These are some of the mistakes that beginners make when using adverbs,
The first one is to use adverbs in each sentence. This may weaken your writing, making it monotonous and boring. Use Adverbs where it’s necessary.
2. Overusing Dialogue Tags
Usage of dialogue tags, like “he said angrily,” “she said softly,” “he said loudly”, should not be overused and should be used where it’s required and replaced them with actions rather than adverbs in the dialogue.
3. Overuse of “Very”.
The use of “very " should be avoided, like “very happy”, “very sad”, “very cold”
Try to substitute with more powerful adjectives, such as “thrilled,” “miserable,” “freezing.” Use “very " where it matters.
4. Not Trusting the Reader
As a writers don’t try to over-explain to readers. Give space to the reader to feel or experience the scene through actions and details.
5. Ignoring Strong Verbs
Don’t ignore the use of weak verbs + adverbs instead of strong verbs. Use strong verbs in your writing to develop your scene and practice using precise verbs.
FAQ (People Also Ask)
Final thought
The common beginner mistake in writing fiction is the overuse of adverbs—but it is also simple to correct it. Your writing will become more interesting by using stronger verbs, showing by actions and avoiding words like “very“.
Remember, Do not narrate or tell the reader what is going on, show them.
Do not overcorrect as removing all adverbs may make your writing sound unnatural. Practice writing it in a balanced, not perfect, way.
Good writing will keep the readers more interested and will make your scenes seem more real. Try to apply these steps to one paragraph today and you will instantly notice the difference.
Know more on Beginner Writing Mistakes to Avoid to avoid in your first book of fiction and Turn your ideas into a story know How to Start Writing a Book
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